Wednesday, 1 September 2010

THEM - Three Word Wednesday

Three Word Wednesday
where each week you write something
using the three prompt words.
This week's words are . . .
break, negative, surface

T H E M

She was

luminous, lit up
she bent like a willow
so that she wouldn't break
touching the ground
with green fingers
she was reaching
down into the
earth

he
studied
the negative
stroking the surface
polishing the reflections
and making them
shine

Between them
the electrons flowed
completing a circuit
so much electricity
you could feel it
crackling
in the
air

.

20 comments:

Vandana said...

It's beautiful :)

Rinkly Rimes said...

Science and romance combined. Clever.

K said...

this poem is such a lovely mix, sensual, sterile, scientific, natural, erotic...lovely. This one will be with me for a while.

Mia Mirza said...

So beautiful... It's sparking but soft at the same time...

ThomG said...

really well done.

gautami tripathy said...

Keep writing..

pitching forward

Leo said...

very different, and well said.. :)

My 3 Word Wednesday

Jay Thurston said...

Creative work, unique, well written!

Angel said...

I really like the flow of this piece.

Alexis Hallum said...

"So much electricity you could feel it crackling in the air"

I just love how you ended this lovely poem...

R.S. Bohn said...

Oooh, that is beautiful! Form and function, poetry and science.

b said...

this was not only a feast for the mind...it was a feast for the eyes! Very creative.

b

http://www.itcrossedmymindblog.com

Susannah said...

Hello everyone, Thanks very much for dropping in, reading and leaving a comment, I really appreciate it!

Susannah :-)

Dreamer said...

Beautiful words and I liked the form too.

Ramesh Sood said...

Pretty interesting take on the prompts..

♠ Tharangni ♠ said...

its wow!! amazing! the way u wrote it and interpreted the design! :)

christopher said...

Well crafted, building a life between them suggested. We need not describe everything.

Purple Houses said...

Another beautiful piece. I love how you conveyed his chemistry with her.

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a comment. :-)

ms pie said...

beautiful portrait... and the format gives the story more power... after rereading slowly the thought came across as if perhaps the greening of technology... the quiet still of yes and no

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