Wednesday, 22 September 2010

Destiny - Three Word Wednesday

Three Word Wednesday where you write something using the three prompt words.
This week's words are gait, nudge, ripen

D E S T I N Y
She altered her gait to match his, lengthening her stride as they crossed the steel bridge with clanging footsteps and anticipation. The afternoon was heavy with the scent of blossom and the curious dragonflies that shadowed her were iridescent and shimmered like spun glass as they danced in the air around them.

They stepped on to the winding path and their footfalls were softened by the springy grass underfoot. She felt her excitement building when she heard the drums in the distance and the soft ethereal sound of the flute blowing on the breeze. The pale blue sky peeped through the canopy of fresh green leaves, dappled and lit with sunlight, they threw a kaleidoscope of light filled shapes at her feet as she walked.

He was there, strong and silent beside her as always, his silver hair a striking contrast against his cloak of the deepest blue velvet. He had slowed his pace and the flickering sunshine on his face threw his features into sharp relief. She was so glad that this day had come and that he was there to walk this path with her.

It had taken many years to gain the knowledge, to ripen her understanding so that it may now bear the fruit of the lineage she was born into, and now she was finally ready and felt the joy rise through her body like a thousand white butterflies heading toward the light.

They were getting close and the sounds of the drums seemed to be beating in time with her heartbeat, the rhythmic cadence of the flute echoing her breath. She heard the soft chanting and it pulled her forward through the twisting branches and out into the clearing. She was finally there...

Silence fell as soon as she appeared and the circle was hushed, ribbons decorating the four quarters lifted and fell in the breeze, it was the only movement in this sacred place. The trees were draped in garlands and the smell of sweet incense permeated the air. The faces of those gathered were turned toward her and she saw the expectation in their waiting eyes.

She felt him behind her and heard his soft breathing.

"It is time" . . . his rich voice reverberated around the silent grove.

The women began the gentle chant and heart beat drums joined the wash of sound that swirled around her as she looked down at her white gown and the girdle she had so intricately woven with delicate spring flowers. She could feel the weight of responsibility hanging in the air.

From the corner of her eye she saw him walk forward to stand by her side, he looked deep in her eyes and slowly nodded his head before reaching out and with a gentle hand gave her an almost imperceptible nudge forward.

She was unable to move, rooted to the spot for what seemed an age.

. . . and then from out of the shadows came the dragonflies, effervescent and joyful as they cut the heavy air with their light, they bought their sparkling energy, their magic and their blessings. It was the sign she was waiting for and her heart leapt and she smiled and stepped forward into the waiting circle and her destiny.
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14 comments:

ThomG said...

the addition of the dragonflies really made this piece pop, I think. It's so visual. I liked it very much.

Tumblewords: said...

Beautifully written -

Thomma Lyn said...

Lovely! It flows so well, and the detail creates a vivid picture in my mind.

David said...

The thing that I like best about your writing is that it is so vivid. The way you describe the sights and smells and all of the small details, it makes me feel that I am there with her. In other words, I liked your story. :)

Deborah said...

Oh My Goodness, this is just so vividly painted and so so beautifully written , too many wonderful lines to comment on ... just wonderful ... I loved it!

VL Sheridan said...

Oh this was breath taking. Love the dragon flies, the richness of this whole piece. So well done.

shail said...

Lovely. Like David above says, 'vivid' :)

Greyscale Territory said...

There is a feeling of legendary Celtic tradition and culture plus a hint of ancient superstition! Enigmatic!

placebythefire said...

Lovely work, very atmospheric, loved the dragonflies too.

(Just a couple of typos though- should be "iridescent" and "kaleidoscope" - hope you don't mind me pointing those out.)

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for the lovely comments, this was a different type of piece than my usual and I really enjoyed it.

placebythefire - thanks for that, fixed now. :-)

Ramesh Sood said...

I was reading through with a beautiful flow and then dragonflies made me stop but lo! I rode on them and flew and danced.. what a wonderful write this..

Andy Sewina said...

Love the scene you describe so well here!

Nanka said...

Loved the descriptions and the choice of words, The dragonflies were the sparkling energy of course..Kept me reading spellbound.

Zouxzoux said...

Just lovely....

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