Wednesday, 8 September 2010

Packaged - Three Word Wednesday

Three Word Wednesday where you write something using the three prompt words.
This week's words are charm, feast, robust

P A C K A G E D

I am bound around with sticky tape marking me fragile

this sturdy parcel of me is not robust, It bends and tears

If I am handled roughly, little things inside me shatter

I'm swaddled in wadding. . . the extra padding helps
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

If I am handled with care, moved gently, not jolted

my tune plays, the ringing charm of me begins to sing

the air becomes light and sparkles, fractured with laughter

the peaceful gliding doves land and feed without danger
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

Scattered seed, strewn like confetti a feast on the dark earth

the soft grey feathers of them, a balm that dresses all wounds

dark night swooping, falling in graceful folds around my neck

the tattered, battered, packaging of me falls gentle at my feet


H A N D L E W I T H C A R EH
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17 comments:

ThomG said...

this has a sweetness to it, a lyrical sense, like a dream set to music. Does that make sense? I like it.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Thom. Yes it does make sense and now you say it I can see it too.

Thanks for your visit, it is good to meet you. :-)

Angel said...

Love the creative description of this piece.

Witless Exposition said...

This is beautiful! Reading good poetry always makes me want to write my own, but I know that's not where my gift lies.

Can't wait to read more!

Fickle Cattle said...

Nice. I like how the poem moves from one sound and one image to another.

http://ficklecattle.blogspot.com/

Amity said...

This is just so sweet Susannah!

If only carefully handled, then it could really be a wonderful package!

Gary Baker said...

Love it. That's all I can say: love it.

Deborah said...

A wonderfully written self discriptive piece, beautifully poetic :o)

Dreamer said...

Lovely, on so many levels.My fav part- If I am handled with care, moved gently, not jolted/ my tune plays, the ringing charm of me begins to sing/ the air becomes light and sparkles, fractured with laughter

christopher said...

A good concept, well handled. It's what we do, experimenting here and there. I like what has happened here.

VL Sheridan said...

What a lovely piece! I especially love "the ringing charm of me begins to sing". It reminds me of Walt Whitman. Very well done.

Carrie Burtt said...

Susannah this is truly beautiful...i love it! :-)

Jeeves said...

Lovely

Susannah said...

Thanks very much for your comments, I really appreciate them.

Thanks for dropping in and reading!

Good to meet you. :-)

Jinksy said...

I think my packaging has suffered fron too much rough handling. My bubble wrap is popping in protest! LOL :) I loved the idea here.

Jingle said...

smart post.

Jingle said...

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Thanks for the participation!
Happy Monday!

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