Thursday, 9 September 2010

I Have - Magpie Tales # 31

http://magpietales.blogspot.com hosts a weekly writing prompt, write a small vignette or poem using the photo below as your inspiration.

I H A V E

I have closed my eyes
and cut the ties
that bind me
to you

I have snipped and
cauterised the
fraying ends
with fire

I have asked forgiveness
for the hurt I caused
and I have forgiven
you in turn

I have mentally released
you and said goodbye
but it seems you
have never left

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28 comments:

Deborah said...

Captures the feel of the image perfectly ... wonderfully written!

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

This was very touching..specailly the last paragraph...how often we leave loved ones behind but they rarely do leave our thoughts.. Bful magpie

kathew said...

wow-powerful and poignant

willow said...

Very touching and I'm sure therapeutic, too. Well done.

Jinksy said...

I have closed my eyes
and cut the ties
that bind me
I have snipped and
cauterised the
fraying ends

I so want these lines to be the start of another poem! Please? :)

Susannah said...

Jinksy - ooh, I agree, thank you! I may just do that. :-)

Martin H. said...

Some impressions go deep, don't they? Excellent poem.

Lyn said...

Sort of like a dress rehearsal..the right words..still there, to be done again? Very good.

annell said...

Really nice. I liked it.

sukipoet said...

quiet and beautiful

Gabriela Abalo said...

beautiful and touching poem

:)

Kristen Haskell said...

So beautifully written. Real love that ends it never truly leaves us no matter what extent we go to "cauterize the fraying ends."

Tumblewords: said...

Strong piece. Sometimes it requires constant re-doing.

Rinkly Rimes said...

I loved the 'shape' of your poem as well as the sentiments.

senderupwords said...

This is a nice write and I do like teh shape of the words. Bisous, Love and Light, Sender

Carrie Burtt said...

Susannah this is such a powerful poem....truly moving. :-)

Brian Miller said...

try as we might somethings...some memories...some people stay with us...nice mag...

christopher said...

I agree with Jinsky :) Do another with that phrase in the poem, see what happens then.

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

Wow! You let out some old ghosts with this one!
Well done.

Rene

Teresa said...

This is great. I love the specific medical terms to elaborate on the phrase cutting the ties. Nicely done.

Maya said...

i wish i could cauterize some ends too... i loved the imagery of cutting the ends and cauterizing them... we often cut our bindings but they still bleed don't they?

CityMom2 said...

I like the way your thoughts were shaped, like a chalice.

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for the great comment, they are much appreciated.

Thanks for dropping in and reading. :-)

NanU said...

A lovely and peaceful work.

Stafford Ray said...

Have I read too much into the final lines? The poem strongly describes an emotional ending, a cutting off "...cauterised the
fraying ends..." But that was while the eyes were closed. In the ending, "but it seems you
have never left". The disgarded other is still (physically) there!
Move out! :-)

Helen said...

... there are ties not meant to be broken.

Selma said...

That final line grabbed me by the heart. Some people, well, they're just always with us. Wonderful, Susannah.

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for your comments. :-)

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