Monday, 27 September 2010

Backbone - Carry on Tuesday #72

This weeks prompt for Carry On Tuesday is ...
'It started out as a feeling which then grew into a hope'

B A C K B O N E

She
felt
it
start
inside
her
.
and
crawl
naked
up
her
spine
.
clinging
to
her
on
the
inside

.
It
started
out
as
a
feeling

.

which
then
grew
into
a
hope
.
up
through
the
dark
inner
spaces
.
a
tiny
seed
seeking
the
light
.

Also shared at the poetry pantry at poets united.

15 comments:

Deborah said...

Oh this is wonderful and such a clever way to write it ... just brilliant!

Mama Zen said...

This is excellent!

This Girl Remembers said...

Oh, lovely! And very similar in imagery to what I ended up with, too. I love seeing where the prompt takes everyone. :)

Flying Monkey said...

I like this a lot.

Jingle Poetry said...

super lovely.

Tilly Bud said...

I love the way the monostich is also a calligram. Clever.

Elizabeth said...

I like this, but then I would. We are on a similar wavelength. I also like your presentation of the piece. It works really well.

Elizabeth

gospelwriter said...

"a tiny seed seeking the light" - I like your poem a lot, especially considering the title you gave it

I recently wrote a poem in this single-word-line format, but didn't quite have the nerve to publish it... it is perfect for your poem, perfect

Maureen said...

Clever presentation for your thoughtful poem.

Nara Malone said...

Clever, love the way the poem is presented. i love even more the sense of hope you sparked in me. :)

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for the comments, much appreciated. :-)

Jingle said...

http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/10/poetry-potluck-natures-elements-air.html
Greetings!
It is Monday again, I sincerely invite you to join us for a Monday Poetry Potluck party, bring in 1 to 3 poem treats to share via the link on the top! You could use an old poem.

Mary said...

You have definitely characterized 'hope' here. Nice.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love your backbone poem and the clever way you placed it on the page........and I am a big fan of hope, so this one was a winner!

Diane T said...

I love your thoughts expressed so well here, and such an interesting form!

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