Those silvered reflections of you
still exist, strands of spidered silk
woven and so delicately knotted
tracing my veins, footpaths edged
beside the crimson rivers, blood
bound and fluid, still guided
by the high wire touch of you
imperceptable tightropes
where once you walked
woven and so delicately knotted
tracing my veins, footpaths edged
beside the crimson rivers, blood
bound and fluid, still guided
by the high wire touch of you
imperceptable tightropes
where once you walked
28 comments:
this was beautiful... breathless..
Wow, so wonderful...
Your words are like music which leaves you holding your breath ... absolutely beautiful!!
'the high wire touch of you' ... great Magpie!
Mystical...
mirror at crossroads
Beautifully written with words well chosen and arranged JUST right! I like 'silvered reflections' and 'strands of spidered silk' especially.
You have transplanted your emotion directly into my heart. What a beautiful piece.
this is absolutely stellar
This is a great line!!!!
'by the high wire touch of you'
really nice read. :-)
Silvered reflections like spider silk? Lovely images...
Holy words! Loved the "blood bound and fluid" and everything else, too!
oh swoon
oh wonderful
You had my attention with the first line. Wonderful use of words which I thoroughly enjoyed.
I love the tracing of memories here.
Beautiful and simple with words that settle into the soul.
"strands of spidered silk
woven and so delicately knotted"
a wonderful line!
Susannah,
Like the tension here! I especially love the last 3 lines!
Here's something for you to try, break each line into its own stanza of two or three lines each, with a spacing break in between, you will notice the tension level goes up even more.
Kandy :)
Love the way you write ...
In this I like ..strands of spidered silk..
Beautiful Susannah..
Thanks for visisting me.Really appreciate your comments.
Beautiful imagery... nicely done.
excellent verse...love all the texture in the words you use...heading for the highwire you set..nice magpie!
absolutely beautiful, loved reading this.
grand opening,
fabulous spirits....
keep it coming.
Whole piece is fab but the last two lines. Yummo. Love and Light, Sender
the spidered silk woven.....beautiful words....bkm
Beautifully written.
Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and comment. It is much appreciated. :-)
Breathtakingly satiny.. very well written!!
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