T H I S...S T O R Y
Autumn wraps itself around me like a cloak.
The spent leaves, falling, illuminated shards of stained glass, gently swirling.
Firebrand fingers touch the ground where you walk, tracing your steps.
The long shadows, stark and blatant as you grasp my cold hand and speak words that fall from your gentle lips like bombs, detonating on impact with my open heart.
You are going to a far off land and I must stay here alone.
In the vast space that opens in the silent tick of these chilling seconds, I realise that this is the scariest story I've ever heard...
and I fall into your arms like a stone.
(Exactly 100 words without the prompt)
27 comments:
Absolutely brilliantly written, every word is just wonderful!!
Sad to think that this happens all the time...I enjoyed your vivid imagery.
Hmmm sounds like someone is going to miss em very much as he goes off to war . That was very good .
Excellent imagery! Nice job for sure.
Inspired writing...gorgeous, evocative...Peace
Wonderful use of the prompt. I loved every word you wrote. My heart aches for you.
Wow. Absolutely brilliant!
Well done.
That IS a scary story, for sure.
Creative take on the prompt.
=)
Wow, this is an amazingly haunting story. I can feel the pain that is involved with someone going away. Good job.
brilliantly written
Beautiful writing..
perception
I hate war! It leaves behind so much devastation.~Ames
Gorgeous. Lovely. And horribly scary. Very well done.
You took us there; very well done!
This was beautifully done, you used the prompt in a totally unexpected way. And this really is more scary than ghosts and goblins, isn't it? Kat
What wonderful imagery! This story evoked beauty as well as pain. Great centus!
And thanks for the reminder.....cj
Great job...you rocked the prompt!
loved the imagination you used in this sad story.
Tina from Mummy Diaries
Beautiful writing! Thank you for sharing such a lovely piece.
This is wonderfully written. It's beautiful and powerful.
xoRobyn
beautiful, sad and well written a perfect combination
Beautiful and heartbreaking.
I echo all previous sentiments. Truly an inspired piece! Excellent!
Sad, but beautifully written. Good use of the prompt.
Well done!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's & Sara's SC-post Week 25
Good golly girl.
This post was most definitely a TREAT!
You are one of the most vivid writers. You express emotion so purely and it always feels like some of the words you stole right from my heart.
Thanks for linking.
Have a BOOtiful Halloween.
Thanks everyone for your great comments. :-)
heartfelt lines.
well done.
xx
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