Saturday, 21 August 2010

Writers Island Prompt #17 - Time Travel

Time Travel

I opened the door and there you were
Just as I had left you so long ago

The frozen moment immortalised
still replaying. . . over and over

But, now I am here again
to tell you I am sorry

to ask you to
forgive
me

This was written for
Writer's Island
Prompt #17

For more of my poetry visit Out of My Ocean

11 comments:

flaubert said...

pan I love the form of this poem and the words expressed!
Pamela

pan said...

Thanks very much Pamela. :-)

Wayne Pitchko said...

lots said in a few lines....nicely done with the prompt

gospelwriter said...

I liked this a lot, the journey to sorry can be long and arduous, and it's always a travel in time. I love how the form of the poem shows this, ends of lines coming from far apart to as good as a single point. Well done!

vivienne blake said...

Shape, content, words - everything right about this poem. Thank you.

Deborah said...

Beautiful and Brilliant!!!

Tilly Bud said...

I love the form, especially when it comes to the last stanza.

keiths ramblings said...

Love the look of it and the sound of it. You deserve to be forgiven!

RiikaInfinityy said...

:) Short and sweet, wonderful =)

rob kistner said...

Visually engaging form and what a hopeful write...

...rob

Pan said...

Thanks everyone for the wonderful comments, I really appreciate them.

I am already looking forward to the next prompt! :-)

Good to meet you all.

Pan x

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