She lay there on the cold hard ground. Her hair was fanned around her like a fire, crackling orange tendrils curling on the dark earth. Sparks of life in this chilling scene.He felt his heart leap into his throat, the pulsing in his temples threatened to unbalance him as he felt the sweat oozing from hidden pores, it collected in the deep lines of horror etched into his brow.
His voice had gone, he tried with huge effort of will to summon it from deep within him where it had retreated. It came like a train through a tunnel, bursting out into the light .
J a n e! . . . the desperation in his voice released the tension in his body and he dropped to his knees and buried his unbelieving head in his hands.
Oh, hello, I didn't hear you there! What are you doing creeping up on me like that! - I was just trying to get a close up photo of these beautiful colours. Look at that turquoise and isn't the rust a wonderful accent? I thought we could use it in the dining room when we redecorate.
What on earth is wrong? she said, as she finally scrambled to her knees and turned to see him sobbing.
6 comments:
That is a most surprising and wonderful magpie.
At 65, I've done it! My poetry book - Life's Journey by Carmen Henesy - is out on Amazon!
( Poems about the things that have been important to me in my journey through life, some humorous, some sad, some that may have meaning to you as well )
http://www.amazon.com/Lifes-Journey-1-Carmen-Henesy/dp/1451547366/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s=books&qid=1274652997&sr=1-1
Well that was fun and caught me off guard!
I wasn't expecting the end - you pulled this off beautifully!
Oh, this is fabulous. I can just imagine someone being frightened, if they would have seen me hunkered down, taking this photo!
Nice twist! And very neatly told. The build up to the "Jane!" is very funny on the second read when we know the end! Great Magpie!
Thanks everyone for your comments.
I look forward to the next Magpie!
(I think I am hooked.)
Nice to meet you all. :-)
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