Wednesday, 11 August 2010

Saturday Centus - Closer Than They Appear

This is my first time taking part in Saturday Centus themed writing meme. This weeks prompt is to write something using the line "objects in the rear view mirror are closer than they appear". Here's mine! :-)

Closer Than They Appear

Objects in the rear view mirror are closer than they appear...

That was the third time she had read it and still she was no nearer to understanding what he meant. She looked down at the now crumpled bit of notepaper that had hastily been torn from its ringed binder. The fragments of torn paper were still clinging grimly to the cryptic message. The tenous link with the page that they were once a part of, reminded her of their marriage.

An involuntary sigh escaped her lips. She still loved him, she just didn't understand how the distance had opened up between them, and now these notes he had taken to leaving for her. Well at least he was trying to make contact, even if it was rather strange.

She caught sight of herself in the mirror of the dressing table, a grey strand falling across her eyes, she hastily pushed it back like she was pushing back time.

Then she saw it over her shoulder, there was another of the notes tucked carefully into the intricate frame of their wedding photo. She walked slowly over and picked up the note and tears sprung to her eyes as she saw the scrawled words. . . always and forever.

She understood this one and ran down to the kitchen to find him.

14 comments:

pan said...

So sorry! I have just re read the instructions and see that it should have been 100 words or less! I had read it as 100 words or more. :(

In fact I stretched this out a bit to get over 100 words. Never mind, please forgive me (I am new to this) I'll remember the correct word count next time.

Terra said...

It was a very nice story! Long or not, our teacher does like us to stick to the rules, however I also know her to be VERY forgiving...I am glad you joined in and look forward to future stories from you!

Kat said...

Hey, everyone makes a mistake. I'm sure Jenny will forgive you this time (just don't let it happen again LOL) This was a really clever, original take on the prompt. Really well done!

pan said...

Thanks very much Terra. :-)

I look forward to joining in on the next one . . . and I will make sure to read it properly next time! ;-)

pan said...

Thanks very much Kat. :-)

I won't do it again, I promise. lol

cj Schlottman said...

You should have seen the trouble I had just linking to the meme! Live and learn. I liked your take on the prompt, really. Please don't be discouraged. See you next week.............cj

Viki said...

It was a lovely story anyhow. Great job.

pan said...

Thanks very much CJ and Viki. :-)

June Freaking Cleaver said...

Loved the line about pushing back the gray, like pushing back time...lets me know that they're not as young as they once were, and that their relationship might have been a long one...makes me root for them.

Great job! I look forward to your next attempt!

pan said...

Thanks June. :-)

Sue said...

Nice job, and welcome!

=)

pan said...

Thanks Sue. :-)

Jenny said...

Hi Pan! Welcome to SC! Another wonderful writer in the group. Hooray for us all.

I think you did great AND you even linked right so you are totally forgiven for going over a tiny bit.

The phrase "The fragments of torn paper were still clinging grimly to the cryptic message" was worth the total price of admission here.

Really excellent writing.

See you this week, I hope!

pan said...

Thanks very much Jenny.

I really enjoyed it and will try again this week too (and remember the right number of words!)

Good to meet you all. :-)

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