Poets United holds a weekly poetry prompt. The Thursday Think Tank
This weeks prompt word is
W A T E R
Here's mine, it is not a new one but it sprang to mind when I read this weeks prompt :-)
This weeks prompt word is
W A T E R
Here's mine, it is not a new one but it sprang to mind when I read this weeks prompt :-)
The ink black ocean that knows my name
yearns to enfold me in her depths
never more to search the sky
with eager eyes, that drink colour like wine
Intoxicated by blue
The howling wind, abetted by
insistent waves that scream and shout
tug me to her lonely shore
where watching, one eyed
her accomplice moon
does nothing to reassure me
Once again down into the surging seas
internal tides, beginning to swell
I know that as the rhythm enters me
searching for my surrender
I will begin to dance
18 comments:
i like how the ocean has a personality and a rhythm - and yeah - i'm in for a round of ocean dance….smiles
Your poem is intoxicating in itself. It is so full of beautiful imagery. "The ink black ocean that knows my name yearns to enfold me in her depths". That grabed me and captivated me to the last lovely word. :-)
Wonderfully written ... I love this :o)
Hi Claudia, I'm glad that you will join the ocean in her dance too!
Thanks for your commeny, it is good to meet you. :-)
Hi Carrie, thanks so much, I really appreciate your nice comment.
Good to see you.
Deborah, thank you very much. :-)
The ending is stunning...."I will begin to dance. Very nicely written.
This is a magical poem...I felt myself being drawn into it as inexorably as your heroine was pulled into the sea. Just lovely!
l\Lynette
Whoa! What a fantastic poem!"that drink color like wine"...... "Her accomplice moon"......and I LOVE the ending "I will begin to dance." As a lifelong ocean lover, I so related to this poem - so beautifully written!!!!!
And Susannah, thank you so much for your kind comments on my site. Your words mean a lot, coming from such an accomplished poet!
i love how alive the ocean is and the ending is simply beautiful!
A beautiful poem with so many beautiful images!
An excellent post so full of stunning imagery! Wonderfully written! =)
-Weasel
You've pretty well captured what it is about water that I hate so much...
Lovely writing, Susannah.
'The ink black ocean that knows my name'
Your opening line is wonderful.
Lovely the rhythm like the waves on the shore ending in a dance...nice...bkm
I love this; I made the bay my lover in my water poem! Your words are like wine intoxicating~Beautiful!
Thanks everyone, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a comment.
Good to meet you. :-)
From the first line, your poem pulled me in and rocked me in its tumbling images. Beautiful,
Elizabeth
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