If I die young
I want you to know
that however it happens
I was ready to go
It may not ring true
but I think you will find
that believing it so
will give peace of mind
So goodbye and good luck
may your life be fulfilling
and when your time is up
I hope you'll be willing
For life is a journey
an adventure, a game
we come into it alone
we go out the same
Our birth and our death
are two sides of one line
just the way it should be
. . . part of the design
The moments are precious
so don't hang around
just relish the living
each sight and each sound
Then if you too die young
I know that you'll know
that however it happens
you were ready to go. . .
For the Saturday Centus prompt - If I die young. . .
Rules: Use up to 150 words AND the 4 words of the prompt (154 total maximum words)
23 comments:
Oh that's just wonderful Su ... I loved it :o)
That's beautiful! I love the way you weave your words.
Just perfect -- you definitely have a way with words!
Wonderful poem and a brilliant take on the prompt !
Poetry, at it's best! truly a sweet inspiration! Thank you!
In spite of the sad tone of the prompt, you have, with your soft, smooth and hopeful words, painted a beautiful picture with this poem . It is wonderful!
Namaste..........cj
What a brilliant piece of poetry. I am so envious of such talent!
A lovely whirl of words. Yes, there's two things we can be certain of, once we're born we're going to die.
It's how we fill that time in between those two dates that makes the difference, just as you have said here with this lovely piece.
That was beautiful, gave me goosebumps.
This is a great poem Thanks for sharing
What a wonderful piece, Susannah! Brava!!
I really like this. It's meaningful, upbeat and has great rhyme and rhythm.
xoRobyn
So, so beautiful. And true. I was touched by your words.
Like the words that convey a willingness to face each day as it comes and the rhyme scheme that accompanies it...
Nice one, Susannah!
=)
very rhythmic, kind of soothing and definitely interesting!
Lovely poem! It was something like this that I wanted to write for this challenge, but just could not get anything to rhyme. So I gave up!
What a beautiful piece of writing.
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC Wk 68 'If I die young'
I like your fortitude and talented wordsmithing. I like your underlaying message of live your life so as to always be ready to go. Well writ!
That was beautiful! What a wonderful poem and a terrific sentiment! A brilliant take on this week's prompt!
Lovely poem! Wise words.
Thanks very much everyone. I appreciate your kind comments. :-)
Oh my goodness, Susannah! This was wonderful! I really, really loved this!
Thanks Jenny. :-) x
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