Thursday, 2 September 2010

Kiss - Thursday Think Tank Prompt 13

Poets United holds a weekly poetry prompt
The Thursday Think Tank
This weeks prompt word is


I felt you before I saw you
that shiver, that tingle

you reached out
you touched me

sparks ignited
you felt it too

Your eyes darkened
I held your gaze
and returned it

such electricity

flame becomes fire
it seeks expression

intense energy
set in motion

Pulled into your arms
your warm cheek
your hot breath

your kiss

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Mary said...

You have defintely brought the moment before the KISS to life!

Elizabeth said...

The build up of anticipation works well in this one, from the first shiver and tingle to the actual kiss.


Ella said...

Love the build up til the sparks
unite! You have given it life!
Well Done~

Diane T said...

Beautifully described, Susannah. Love this poem!

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

well done.

Weasel said...

Wonderfully written! =)


Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wowzers, makes me re-think the whole chocolate thing:)Great poem.

Anonymous said...

'I felt you before I saw you...'. A perfect opening line if ever there was one!This piece is beautifully written, absolutely taut with longing and anticipation..lovely!

Susannah said...

Hello everyone. :-)

Thanks so much for your comments! I appreciate them.

...and sherry, yes rethink the kiss but keep the chocolate too! ;-)

Good to see you all.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

A pulsating build up to that wonderful kiss!
Superbly achieved.
Best wishes,

Anonymous said...

oh!...that space in time right before lips touch...torturous, sweet, frightening, everything wonderful...

You just caught that moment in the written world. I got butterflies just reading it ; )


Philip Thrift said...

Passionately written!

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