Saturday, 25 June 2011

Exchanging Unseen Gifts

I give to you a maple leaf
a yellow button
a stone
The leaf is a jewel
the button a sun
the stone a mountain

You give to me a diamond ring
a designer dress
a phone
The ring is a promise
the dress a statement
the phone a voice

I give to you a birds soft feather
a cockle shell
a glove
The feather is my embrace
the shell my ear
the glove my hand

You give to me a large house
a beautiful garden
a dove
The house is a sanctuary
the garden my freedom
a dove - your love



For Sunday Scribblings prompt - Give

Not autobiographical - though I wouldn't mind the large house. ;-) This one just 'arrived.'

22 comments:

jaerose said...

It's good to have you back..and what an 'arrival'..beautiful..the opening verse particularly..not only the words but the items..you wouldn't think of them as being enviable but in some ways they are bigger than the house (although you're right..one of those would be great..) Jae

Altonian said...

What a lovely poem. It looks at first as though the gifts are one-sided, but they were obviously understood and appreciated for what they were - expressions of love!

withgraceandgratitude said...

Lovely, just lovely!

Wendy said...

agree with altonian. My mind immediately says that the one giver is practical (giving shelter and food via garden) whereas the other gives things highly tied to emotion. But by poem's end, it seems that both are the givers of emotional gifts...just in differing ways.

Linda Jacobs said...

This is absolutely beautiful!

Susannah said...

Thanks very much everyone, your comments are much appreciated. :-)

annell said...

Beautiful piece!

Susannah said...

Thanks Annell. :-)

Kim Nelson said...

And in the giving, balance and partnership are forged. Lovely.

Kate said...

Great write! So reflective and lovely.

Jeanne said...

This is so pretty. I enjoyed the simplicity of the gifts.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much everyone, I appreciate you reading and leaving a comment. x

Lilibeth said...

What a beautiful love poem...creative and full of feeling.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much lilibeth. :-)

poetry-diary.com said...

I like the simplicity and eloquence and symmetry of this. A lovely poem.

thingy said...

Very beautiful. I like the emotional/sentimental gifts, but, I'll take the ring and house, too. : )

Jo Bryant said...

Such lovelt imagery in this love poem

Sherry Blue Sky said...

SOOOOOOOOO beautiful!!!! I love it.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much all. x

Neva Flores said...

Absolutely beautiful, deep and meaningful

themslvh said...

Very light and fun, full of meaning! Wonderful write. Happy 4th!

Susannah said...

Thanks Neva and themslvh. :-)

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