Inspired by the Thursday Think Tank prompt 30 Observation.
From the brief -Observations: Attention to Detail - How often do we look beyond the surface? There is so much we miss out on in life at a quick glance; so much that we tend to never see or we do see but pay little attention to it later. For this prompt, it is all about paying close attention to detail...
O b s e r v a t i o n
It's there in tiny detail...
a criss cross map, aged,
the crackles and lines blue
of the palest kind, wandering
across the fragile surface, a
landscape dotted with trees,
a babbling brook, and the sad
looking man by the meandering
lane that winds itself toward
the arched doorway, where
a woman stands waiting,
unaware that I am holding
their world, etched into
the crazed porcelain
of a broken bowl.
I wrote this about a broken piece of old pottery, its glaze crackled with age, and in those tiny criss cross lines a picture formed, a scene appeared before my eyes...
11 comments:
Nice one - I enjoyed the journey!
I love this beautifully described scene, and the surprise at the end when one discovers it is painted on a bowl and is being held in your hand. Wonderful poetry!
nice strong images here!! a great poem!! taking us on a journey! :)
Love the ending - nice....bkm
I love the surprise ending and how they crossed paths! Beautiful imagery!
Susannah,
A delightful read.
I had an image of a willow patterned bowl in front of my eyes!
Best wishes, Eileen
'crazed porcelain' - what a phrase! Looking at a world in your hands..that's a happy place to be..especially when you pick out such lovely images..thanks for visiting..I shall ponder how things come out! Jae :)
why not...
Oh, how lovely, Susannah! I too like the look of old pottery pieces, and often make up stories to go along with them. This was a wonderful response to the prompt and a great read...:)
Lynette
well penned.
Happy 2011.
Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and comment, it is much appreciated.
Good to see you all. :-)
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