Sunday, 16 January 2011

Invisible - inspired by Sunday Scribblings

Inspired by Sunday Scribblings prompt 250 - Invisible


I N V I S I B L E
Amorphous, I float.
Silver particles shimmering,
bouncing off the uneven ceiling.
The damp patch, a stained map of
some far off continent, where damsels
are saved and the mountains tower
far up into the turreting clouds.
And there ripped into tiny shreds, tissue
confetti lies like apple blossom, the dirty
rug is transformed, and by its side the bed,
the sheets tangled and knotted. Wrapped
and bathed in speckled moonlight
a slender figure sleeps.

18 comments:

Deborah said...

Oooh, I was totally transported into turreting clouds and speckled moonlight,sooo beautifully written as always! :o)

Susannah said...

Thanks Deborah. :-)

Abigail Bunting said...

Beautiful, glistening, translucent!
Loved it!
"On Paper Wings"

LeiffyV said...

Very nice, transported to another realm with this one. A great ride! Thanks for sharing.

oldegg said...

So much can be read into this intriguing and seductive piece. Coming down to earth looks as though it might be wash day!

flaubert said...

Agreed a seductive piece.
Pamela

WarmSunshine said...

i agree with oldegg... and i liked the imagery you put into these lines.

Dropping by from SS :)

booguloo said...

With all that visual imagery it must be a great dream to keep sleeping.

Understanding Alice said...

how lovely - and intruging :)

Jenny said...

That was beautiful.

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone, I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a comment. x

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the damsels, the mountains, the "turreting clouds" - wow! - wonderful poem from the shimmery silver right to the slender form in the tangled sheets. Beautiful, Susannah.

Jane Doe said...

Such a beatiful vivid, piece. I was hooked from the first line to the last.

Jingle said...

love the title...

well done poetry.

Susannah said...

Sherry, Jane and Jingle, thanks very much for your comments. Much appreciated :-)

Mary said...

Susannah, this is a sensual poem, filled with feeling...it lightens my heart.

Susannah said...

Thanks Mary. :-)

Good to see you. x

Jinksy said...

A figure asleep in the moonlight- lovely word-picture...

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