Inspired by Sunday Scribblings prompt 250 - Invisible
I N V I S I B L E
Amorphous, I float.
Silver particles shimmering,
bouncing off the uneven ceiling.
The damp patch, a stained map of
some far off continent, where damsels
are saved and the mountains tower
far up into the turreting clouds.
And there ripped into tiny shreds, tissue
confetti lies like apple blossom, the dirty
rug is transformed, and by its side the bed,
the sheets tangled and knotted. Wrapped
and bathed in speckled moonlight
a slender figure sleeps.
17 comments:
Oooh, I was totally transported into turreting clouds and speckled moonlight,sooo beautifully written as always! :o)
Thanks Deborah. :-)
Beautiful, glistening, translucent!
Loved it!
"On Paper Wings"
Very nice, transported to another realm with this one. A great ride! Thanks for sharing.
So much can be read into this intriguing and seductive piece. Coming down to earth looks as though it might be wash day!
Agreed a seductive piece.
Pamela
i agree with oldegg... and i liked the imagery you put into these lines.
Dropping by from SS :)
With all that visual imagery it must be a great dream to keep sleeping.
how lovely - and intruging :)
Thanks everyone, I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a comment. x
I love the damsels, the mountains, the "turreting clouds" - wow! - wonderful poem from the shimmery silver right to the slender form in the tangled sheets. Beautiful, Susannah.
Such a beatiful vivid, piece. I was hooked from the first line to the last.
love the title...
well done poetry.
Sherry, Jane and Jingle, thanks very much for your comments. Much appreciated :-)
Susannah, this is a sensual poem, filled with feeling...it lightens my heart.
Thanks Mary. :-)
Good to see you. x
A figure asleep in the moonlight- lovely word-picture...
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