Wednesday, 12 January 2011

Harmless - Inspired by Three Word Wednesday

Inspired by Three Word Wednesday this week's prompt words are harmless, moist, yelp

Harmless

You profess to be harmless
all meringue and scarlet lips
moist and ready to be kissed

and the soft yelp as I peeled the
sticking plaster from your wound
belied the fury that I'd glimpsed

It pays to be able to play a part
when laying on the cold, cold floor
the gun you toted, is still warm

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11 comments:

ThomG said...

this is a powerful piece, one with deeper meaning on successive reads.

jaerose said...

'all meringue and scarlet lips'..brilliant line..and the piece was that in itself...a dark story painted with a light brush..which makes it even more seductive..Jae

VL Sheridan said...

Wow, very intense. So much in such a short of amount of space. Well done.

Deborah said...

Gorgeously written, a pleasure to read!

Ramesh Sood said...

A nice poem..well crafted in few lines.. good!

R.S. Bohn said...

I, too, love "all meringue and scarlet lips." This almost reads as noir to me -- noir poetry? I think so! Well done.

Sheilagh's Sweet Nothings said...

Dark and utterly delicious.Loved this.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much for the comments, much appreciated. :-)

This one just sprang out of the prompt words, strange what is triggered isn't it?

Good to see you all.

Nunee said...

This piece makes me think of all the possibilities leading to "the gun you toted, is still warm"! Oh yes...this was enjoyed :-P

Kodjo Deynoo. said...

A strong message behind this

Lilibeth said...

A story well told in such a few words. I read them three times and finally pieced it all together...like clues. It was fun.

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