Tuesday, 23 November 2010

Trophies - Magpie Tales 42

Inspired by this weeks Magpie Tales and the photo below.

They meant so much to you
the trophies.

The exhibits
of bravado
and merit.

You
believed
them
to show
your worth.

You used them
as a mirror
to see
yourself
reflected.

You kept them
in an ornate
glass cabinet
where they
could be
seen
but
never
touched.

Rather
like
your
feelings.


Linked to the poetry pantry at Poets United

25 comments:

Caty said...

wow this was powerful. loved how you wrote it.

gautami tripathy said...

This is so deep. And true for someone I know..

shifting with the winds

Teresa said...

Such a sad poem. I'd hate to think it took trophies to feel worthwhile and never sharing the joy of emotions. Well done.

madamebutterfly said...

I enjoyed this post - trophies do help remind us of our past glories!

Brigid said...

Excellent poem and so true of many men.

Kristen Haskell said...

Fantastic writing. So sad when things measure up more than people!

kathew said...

thoughtful post- I like how you shaped the poem too.

Steve said...

The shallowness of achvement reflected...
Nice work. Thank you

Rashmi said...

Beautiful poem..I liked the last lines..

faith said...

Wow, that is really sad and true to life!

Cad said...

A scenario that happens all too often...

Helen said...

So true, so sad ... I have lived this.

Friko said...

Oops, killer last line.
Excellent vignette.

Berowne said...

Imaginative, powerful writing.

Jingle said...

cute shape,
powerful tale with so few words.
wow.

My Magpie

has some awards/treats in it, have fun and enjoy the blog love.

Tumblewords: said...

Strange how that sometimes happens. :) Powerful piece and surely one which resonates with me.

jaerose said...

How clever - a trophy-shaped poem..and brilliant to boot! Thank you for your kind comment..Jae

Doctor FTSE said...

Rather sad, but cleverly done.

Reflections said...

Wonderful, powerfully stated. That last line has a bit of a bite to it. Nicely written.

Fireblossom said...

I love this. The fainter the conviction within, the greater the need for the baubles and medals without.

gospelwriter said...

oh wow, this is great! - I loved the surprise twist in the final stanza...

Carrie Burtt said...

Wow....Susannah this is amazing....i have known many a person similar to that....love how you captured that distance of the heart in your poem....truly brilliant!

Pat transplanted to MN said...

I liked the analogy of feelings, "seen but never touched." Powerful thoughts

Lucy Westenra said...

Rather sad. Touching. Good

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wonderful! Love the lead-up, and then the last stanza just nails it.

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