Inspired by Sunday Scribblings prompt 242 - What a difference a day makes
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So, what a difference a day makes in this ice cream world of mine, where yesterday slithers down my arm like melted vanilla. The lights are on red and I wait. Sit tight. Don't let the revving of the engine unsettle me. Today will be different. I say that every day. Today is different though, I can feel it. Eyes watching for amber. Green explodes and foot down, I roar. Through empty streets peopled with puppets. Over bridges that span black water. Between towering trees the road snake slithers. Finally round the bend. Obstacles long gone. Outside your peeling gate. I stop.
10 comments:
'Ice cream' world - wonderful turn of phrase..I like how your imagery contrasted the weight of thought that was going on in here..as complex as neopolitan..Jae (thanks for your visit)
I agree with Jaerose in that, when I read "ice cream world," i think vanilla or nice or safe or plain. But the rest of the writing hints that things are not as vanilla or nice or safe or plain as they seem. And I can't decide if the gate the speaker rolls up to is one to be anticipated or dreaded.
I love the complexities, the mysteries you leave here... and I too love the 'ice cream world' to sooth the senses as we began.
Thanks for stopping over at my place.
I love the way your piece is full with metaphors, not only the ice cream but the colours too.
Curiously in Australia we don't have amber to prepare for green, if that were the case everyone would be off as soon as amber appeared!
smart metaphor.
awesome writing...
Happy Sunday!
The ending here is a full throttle experience. The sentence ends just as all my senses are engaged. Great!
and now i want to know what happens next! this was great x
I can feel the fire of impatience at the light and the anticipation at the gate. Excellent.
Is it adventure or danger that lies beyond? I want to know.
Thanks everyone for your great comments. I enjoyed this one very much. It would be interesting to continue with the story. I may just do that! :-)
Thanks for visiting, and for reading, it is much appreciated.
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