Wednesday, 17 November 2010

Gone inspired by Three Word Wednesday

Inspired by Three Word Wednesday this week's prompt words are clutch, delight, happy

. . . . . . . .
Open hands don't clutch
G O N E
The deep delight of you
The loving bones of you
The happy home of you
G O N E
Far as a long dark mile
. . . . . . . .

15 comments:

Michael Solender said...

love: loving bones - nice prose here.

jaerose said...

Such loss..you can almost feel the lack of the other person's hand..very tenderly done..Jae

G.K. Asante said...

Succinct, with a nice weight behind the words.

gautami tripathy said...

Touching...

intriguing walls

Jackie said...

I'm not sure what to think of this so I'm guessing it is a slap to the face? open hands don't clutch? they hit yes?

Ramesh Sood said...

Short with so much depth.. well done..

Janet Aldrich (tec4) said...

Far as a long gone mile ... I hear that. Well done.

Deborah said...

Wow ... soo very final, brilliantly written!

Rinkly Rimes said...

Very sad. 'Far as a long gone mile'.

ThomG said...

creepy, but in a very good way.

faith said...

The repeated GONE repeats like a GONG creating even a more final powerful write.

aldersprig said...

Woosh, like Faith said, I like the resonance of the repeated "GONE."

nimaruichi said...

A terrible loss!

G. Graham said...

Hey, I liked this. Does the form of it have a certain name or did you invent it?

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and leave a comment, it is much appreciated.

Jackie, open hands let go. :-)

G Graham, I don't know if the form has a name? It just came out that way. :-)

Thanks again for visiting.
- Susannah x

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