Thursday, 8 September 2011

When. . .












when the too sharp day
dresses me in its nuance

when the trembling sky
lets go its precious drops

when curtains are drawn
so my light is banished

when there's pin prick holes
in the cat clawed darkness

when hope comes leaping
through bat filled night

when courage is gathered
to face the morning

when the door is unlocked
and windows flung wide

when words mean more
than marks on paper

when. . .


Written for Thursday Think Tank prompt - Windows
Image and words - Susannah Bec

20 comments:

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Susannah,

You have presented a poem which captures both the window in its many guises and how that sets the mood within the soul, for the day.

I liked what I could see......

Eileen

Mystic_Mom said...

Oh but I love this poem. Every line has something, a small gem, and strung together it makes a wonderful chain. Very nicely done.

Mary said...

So much to think about here, so many connected images, so many windows open.

Heaven said...

I like the "when" verses.. nice play of words... like this:

when there's pin prick holes
in the cat clawed darkness

Nice to meet you~

Raining Iguanas said...

Fling them open wide and write away...

Kim Nelson said...

Well Susannah, you've described changing moods and scenes taken in by the constant observer. Layers of meaning could emerge. A history might be laid out here.

Laurie Kolp said...

Beautiful images. What an ending...

Mike Patrick said...

What a vivid image you draw. I love your cat clawed curtain. It makes the whole poem real and down to earth. Words always mean more than marks on paper—yours are lovely.

Daydreamertoo said...

Very nicely done, we close it all to keep it out, or, we open to let it all in, or, vice versa.
Lovely use of the prompt.

Old Ollie said...

really cool - solid use of imagery...cat clawed darkness...

Kerry O'Connor said...

When these things come to pass... then the days ahead may be bravely faced.

Ella said...

WELL DONE; I loved it...I loved how we saw the view change at different hours of the day!

madhumakhi said...

Beautiful combination of imagery and metaphor. I like the unresolved ending too.

PhotoDiction said...

I love the repetition and the many images they evoke. There seems to be some aspect of hope in each of the scenarios, and a hint of resolve to face whatever comes. Very nicely done!

Ravenblack said...

Interesting thoughts, Susannah. It sounds like it could go on. :)

Rashmi said...

Oh! that was wonderful use of the imagery........

shawnacymariekiker said...

'cat clawed darkness'... an image worthy of yeats. beautiful take on the windows prompt.

Jo Bryant said...

great imagery - I especially loved "
when there's pin prick holes
in the cat clawed darkness"

Jinksy said...

And words always mean more than marks on paper...

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for your comments, they are much appreciated.

Susannah x

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