Saturday, 10 September 2011

Mother May I . . .














Mother,
may I take the moon down
from that big dark sky
and cradle it in my arms
for just a little while?

The stars won't miss it, and I
can stroke its silvery surface
and rock it, as it does the tides.
I'll watch it as it changes, like
a shape shifter in my lap.

I will be really careful not to drop it.
I promise to hold it gently but firmly.
It will be safe in my arms, and I'll
sing it that lilting lullaby. . .
you know, the one you sang for me.

Mother, may I take the moon down?
Please. . .


Written for Saturday Centus and the prompt - Mother may I
(Exactly 100 words minus the prompt.)
Image by Susannah Bec

28 comments:

Koby said...

How do you do that...? Paint a picture so beautifully? (I'm jealous :-)

Nonna Beach said...

Beautifully done...I love it !!!

Judie said...

What a beautiful and thoughtful piece! I will think back on it all day long!! Wonderful post!!

jfb57 said...

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!

Bethe77 said...

Such beauty from a childs heart of play. I love what you did with the prompt
Blessings

Karen S. said...

Lovely, your words sing out, but ah no the moon must stay above for all of us! Enjoy your weekend!

beckyp said...

what a wonderful post. Reminds me of George in Its A Wonderful Life when he wants to give Mary the moon. Great job

Viki said...

All I can say is WOW!! This was wonderful. Just like a child asking his mother. Love it.

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This is so sweet, gentle and endearing. I'm in awe of your talent with words.
xoRobyn

Dazee Dreamer said...

Oh my. That was so good. wow.

Jo said...

I am with the rest ... WOW!!!

Sue said...

Perfect.

=)

Laurie Kolp said...

Ahh... I really like this, especially:

I'll watch it as it changes, like
a shape shifter in my lap

madhumakhi said...

Awwwww!!!!!! How cute and innocent!

Neni said...

Cool! I love it since the first line... :)

Rashmi said...

Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!! Susannah........
Wonderful....portrayed such a beautiful picture...with so much delicate feelings..........with words....

Ames said...

Geez this sounds like a fairy tale song. You should put it to music!~Ames

Karen said...

I love where you've taken this children's game. The childlike voice is just right. Mother Earth?

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is something special, Susannah.

fallenelegy said...

beautiful poem, it reminds me of those innocent thoughts of childhood when we actually believed we can cuddle the moon. nicely crafted poem right out of a child's heart.

Jinksy said...

It's beautiful, Susannah...

gautami tripathy said...

I loved the beginning. It set the mood...

shreds

nimaruichi said...

What a lovely endearing piece!

Susannah said...

Thanks very much everyone, I appreciate you reading and your comments.

Susannah x

Bluebell Books said...

you are such a incredible soul.

Bluebell Books said...

You’ve got superb talent in creative writing,
Keep it up.

Please check out short story slam week 10 prompt today.

It is great to write and entertain our children,
Don’t you agree?

Give it a try,
Let your beautiful imagination fly.

Best.
Happy Autumn!
xoxox

Jenny said...

You have taken three simple words and crafted a beautiful, timeless picture with them...and your lovely word crafting.

This is absolutely spellbinding.

I am bookmarking this in my favorites.

This is something I will read again!

Thank you. Your talent is awe inspiring.

Susannah said...

Bluebell and Jenny thanks so much, I really appreciate your comments. :-) x

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