Wednesday, 29 December 2010

Just a Matter of Time

Inspired by Three Word Wednesday this week's prompt words are buckle, evade, wedge

Just a Matter of Time

He tightened his buckle

trying to evade my gaze

eyes anywhere but me

the big clock was ticking

time dripping, eroding

the soft swaddling fabric

that we had used to disguise

the huge wedge, driven deep

into the tiny hairline cracks

that had now opened up

wider than a chasm

19 comments:

Ramesh Sood said...

Oh, it left me wondering.. well...good one..

Greyscale Territory said...

A few disturbing possible interpretations of this! An enigmatic piece of writing!

Deborah said...

Brilliantly written!

Linda Jacobs said...

I like how you use fabric as a metaphor. And "time dripping" is a great image.

jaerose said...

'time dripping'...just like your brilliantly measured words..a little sad but so engaging and recognisable..Jae

Lilibeth said...

Disguising a chasm with swaddling clothes...hmm...I wonder lots of possibilities here, but the real tragedy is apparent.

Kim Nelson said...

That fabric can be so filmy... flimsy. It takes great effort to weave something more solid and protective.

Carrie Burtt said...

This is amazing Susannah!....You have woven a beautiful fabric and picture with your words....this is truly a powerful poem! I love it!
:-)

VL Sheridan said...

Beautiful. Love the use of the swaddling cloth, which is suppossed to keep one safe and secure, as some sort of bandage to try to hold something together.

annell said...

I like the way you did this! Good job! Thanks.

anthonynorth said...

Excellently done, and intriguing.

Rallentanda said...

It doesn't take much to cause an avalanche from hair line cracks.
Good use of metaphor and an interesting poem.

Sheilagh's Sweet Nothings said...

Wonderful imagery!

ms pie said...

a painful place to be this place of too much can't let go....

lalita choudhary said...

Well Done!! Proper use of Prompts!!

~Happy New Year~

Medhini said...

Very well written Susannah! LOved the phrase 'time dripping, eroding' something magical abt it!

aldersprig said...

so very well done, it hit me right in the chest.

Donna Hole said...

Disturbing. I like the creepy feel.

......dhole

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and comment, it is much appreciated.

Good to see you all. :-)

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