Saturday, 4 December 2010

Do You Remember - Saturday Centus week 31

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Do you remember that night?
It was so cold that my breath froze
and fell sparkling like tiny diamonds
in the clear night air.
My hand in yours, we stopped and listened
to the freezing white silence
and overhead there were a million stars
twinkling in the endless sky.
We made our way through that wonderland
leaving our footprints four inches deep.
Red holly berries singing against the snow
towering evergreens, the reminders of forever.
Then a warm fire crackling, dancing reflections
in your laughing eyes.
And just to think that all these memories
are stored away, deep down in the bin of
tangled up holiday lights.

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Week 31 of Saturday Centus the prompt is to use up to 100 words (not including the prompt) using the line "The bin of tangled up holiday lights..."

30 comments:

Koby said...

WOW...beautiful writing.

Teresa said...

Wow. Absolutely awesome. It takes my breath away!

I love how your words paint a picture, how I'm right there visualizing it, feeling it and how there's a thud with the last sentence where - for me - it feels like a longing for the past memory with a sweet sadness.

Kudos! I love it.

Teresa said...

What a beautiful poem. This is certainly a great use of the prompt!

gautami tripathy said...

This is so vivid. Beautiful imagery..

plateau

Ames said...

Oh my...this was absolutely beautiful!!! I was right there in that story the whole time. You are good!~Ames

Cheryl said...

Beautiful, Susannah. I wanted to go for poetry but just didn't have the right mindset today. Love how you wove this together. Really brilliant.

Kat said...

Oh my, I loved this. It's true, the memories that overtake us as we take out these precious mementos every year. Beautifully written. Kat

Sue said...

I liked this! It actually reminds me of an experience my husband and I really had, and it's true that taking out the tree decorations every year brings it all back again.

Ya got me all warm and fuzzy over here!

=)

Tina said...

Lovely. Vivid and poignant. Great job!

Paul Andrew Russell said...

That is beautiful, Susannah. :-)

Viki said...

Oh WOW!! This was so beautiful. I love the words you chose immensely. It had me spellbound. Really good job.

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This is wonderful and filled with beautiful images. I especially like the phrase "reminders of forever."
xoRobyn

Bookie said...

So well done!!!!

cj Schlottman said...

This is beautiful in ways I can't count. I could see your frozen breath, see those twinkling stars, the frozen footprints. I could feel the warmth of the fire and hear it crackling.

Wonderful, just wonderful.......cj

nimaruichi said...

What a weatlh of memories lying entangled in that bin of holiday lights! Beautiful.
:)

The Square Corner said...

Great writing. Thought I was there.

Bernadine said...

wow, truly beautiful picture that you have painted. To think of such beautiful memories held in 'in the bin of tangled up holiday lights.' But so very true, if we stop and live the moments. Wonderful poem!

signed...bkm said...

the ending to perfection....tangled up in holiday lights...that is a lovely memory....blessings...bkm

Sherry Blue Sky said...

A poignant memory, so beautifully rendered. Really lovely, Susannah.

madhumakhi said...

"Freezing white silence", "overheard there were a million stars/twinkling in the endless sky", "Red holly berries singing against the snow" etc create a beautiflu imagery in the my mind. It's a lovely poem and I like the last line particularly. It leaves behind a touch of sadness and you've captured that beautifully.

Old Ollie said...

Authentic piece - got a bin like that myself.

Diane T said...

Hopeful memories!

Judie said...

Your poem is a Christmas gift. Thank you.

Mary said...

What a wonderfully well written memory of a very special time...!

Rashmi said...

Dear Susannah,
Beautiful Susannah, with wonderful images..

"a warm fire crackling, dancing reflections
in your laughing eyes."

shafeena said...

Thats incredible !! if i would have read yours before i wrote mine, i probably wouldn't have posted it !!

Malisa said...

Enchanting...absolutely enchanting! I felt like I was right there with you. You are a talented lady! I totally enjoyed this reading!

I just posted my story. Hope you will stop by and read!

Malisa

Tgoette said...

What a very beautiful and special poem for the holidays. Excellent job!

Susannah said...

Thanks very much everyone for the great comments, they are much appreciated. :-)

Jenny said...

What a moving use of this prompt. I fell in love with this piece of poetry. I want to read it in a book, with quiet black and white photographs...where I can pause with my finger on each word and ponder over and over again how it made me feel.

This was really a masterpiece.

Amazing writing.

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