Wednesday, 23 November 2011

Trying not to move. . . .

It was a shallow hollow
in which she kept
her misery.

No depth at all.

In fact
the slightest motion
would set it moving.

Like a mini tidal wave.

Back and forth,
gaining momentum.

Until it would slosh
over the edges
and run
her pensive face

the limescale trails
of its watercourse.

And then
splish, splash
onto the ground.

the shiny shoes
and cheerful gait
of those who were passing.

She tried to keep it inside,
she really did.

But she found
the constant stillness
so very very hard to bear.Link
Written for Three Word Wednesday using the prompt words - Hollow - Misery - Shallow.


christopher said...

Trying to hide things is like this often, I think, and a lot more work than honest expression. This is rather like they say that smiling is actually less work than frowning due to the number of muscles involved.

We do value our privacy though.

Laurie Kolp said...

Love this... it is hard to keep it in, but we feel so much better when we let it out before the dams are released.

anthonynorth said...

Excellent poignant words.

Mary said...

Excellent! You have really portrayed well how some things REALLY try to get out and eventually DO find their torrents or in splashes.

Christine said...

terrific momentum in this write

Shauna said...

we can only hide pain for so long -
it all depends on who we are near.

great form

oldegg said...

I am a great believer in letting it all flow. It is what your heart is telling you to do. Perhaps imagining that each tear is taking a part of the hurt away might help.

This piece will surely touch the hearts of many.

Berowne said...

Meaningful, moving and very well written.

Sheilagh Lee said...

it is hard to keep it all in some times.well done the way you wrote this.

RMP said...

beautiful! such a visual image you have painted.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wonderful how the feelings are expressed and the shape and form of the poem really makes it work.

Abin Chakraborty said...

great work.craft, passion and graphic presentation combine together with excellent success.

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