Sunday, 20 November 2011

Personal Evolution

She'd been trapped,
drowned in silence.
Oblivious to the planet
and its clockwork motion.

She had skated on thin ice,
started fires and left them to smolder.
She was a maverick, a firebrand,
she walked on a knife edge.

She was mindless, oblivious.
Unaware of the great universe,
and the fleeting spark
that was her life.

Until the diamond
of her consciousness,
was honed and polished.
Rough edges smoothed.

Then all of her facets
began to reflect the light.
And her clear eyes shone
with everything she was.

And in the vast blue sky
of her now peaceful mind.
She watched as her thoughts
went floating by like clouds.

Written for The Sunday Whirl. - Wordle 31

I used all of the words. :-)


Mary said...

Beautiful, Susannah. I love the idea of thoughts floating by like clouds. It give me a dreamlike feeling, which I need right now.

brenda w said...

Wonderful piece, Susanah. I love the change that starts to take place in stanza three, ending with peace. Lovely. Facets is a great word!

Morning said...

thoughtful usage of words,
powerful imagery.

Happy Thanksgiving.

The Unknowngnome said...

A shining gem of your work. Very nice.

Abin Chakraborty said...

evolutions doesnt really stop, does it? who knows if the clouds will usher in a storm? loved the last stanza.

flaubert said...

Susannah, you did indeed use all of the words in a hope-filled piece. Nice.


Magical Mystical Teacher said...

Would that all of us had facets that reflected the light! (Or is that refracted?)

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irene said...

I like the ending too.

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone, good to see you. x

gautami tripathy said...

Beautiful imagery!


Elizabeth said...

This is wonderful Susannah. The story of everywoman who dares to become aware. Thank you,


Carrie Burtt said...

This is beautiful Susannah...i hope you have a wonderful Thanksgiving! :-)

Susannah said...

Thanks very much all. x

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

I like the way you wove in all those words!

Susannah said...

Thanks Rosemary. :-)

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