It was the kind of occasion
that called for handshakes.
The smile you pasted upon
your perfectly powdered,
rouged and lipsticked face,
made me blink in disbelief.
Why would you pretend?
When your soul was melting
and dripping through the gaps
in your tightly woven fingers.
Some things are best left unsaid,
but not this, no, please, not this.
Petals, perfume, claustrophobia,
no space, the elephant in the room
is using up all of the oxygen.
Polite chatter covers the fissures
opening up in the solid ground
beneath our slick stilettoed heels.
You just make it to the exit door,
moments before your slipping mask
says everything that you won't.
For 3WW - (prompt words Blink Kind Occasion)
13 comments:
'your soul was melting and dripping through the gaps'..the discomfort in this piece beautifully captured...it made me feel tense and sweaty just reading..Jae
Gosh you can write ... just brilliant!
Sheilagh Lee said: Extremely well put.Brilliantly written.
Great anxiety and tension!! Typical uneasiness well captured in the poem!!
Very beautiful.. don't want to say more..for others have said it already..keep writing..
Well thought out words to cover a tense situation. Well done!
Really well done. I love trying to figure out where they all are.
I felt the depth of emotion and pain. Fabulously evocative.
My favorite part was about the elephant in the room using up all the oxygen...what a great image.
Brilliant!
this is terrific. i too loved it when you said "The elephant in the room...."
fabulous utilization of the prompt.
trisha
http://sharmishthabasu.wordpress.com/2011/02/17/the-occassion/
Thanks everyone, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. :-)
Good to see you all
Susannah x
Such great lines in this. I read it, then read it again.
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