Wednesday, 18 May 2011

Like a Ragdoll Inspired by Three Word Wednesday

It incensed her to think of it. She could feel the feeling rising up through her body and sitting coiled in her throat, like a serpent ready to strike.

She clamped her jaw shut. Fear now joining the anger. Fear of what might happen if she opened her mouth and unleashed the fury she felt building inside her.

She pushed back her damp hair and squeezed her fists into balls. Her nails were cutting into her palms, causing a necessary distraction, allowing her to keep a lid on this tornado of feeling that was whirling through her body seeking escape.

She heard the skid of car wheels on the gravel drive, and with her face pressed to the window, saw him open the shiny door of his new car and casually, far too casually, saunter toward the front door.

It was then it happened. The storm broke through her defenses and she opened her mouth, threw back her head, and she screamed. The piercing sound rattled around the pink painted room, reverberating back at her as the pitch shifted and became a low mournful howl.

She didn't hear his key in the door or his quiet voice gently calling her name. She was consumed with channeling this whirlwind of feeling up and out of her body.

It was only when she was finally spent that she could feel his soft kisses covering her tear stained face, and empty and hollow she fell like a ragdoll into his waiting arms.

For three word wednesday - prompt words - damp, incensed, skid,

17 comments:

earlybird said...

Powerful stuff, Susannah.

Susannah said...

Thanks earlybird, it is amazing what three words can inspire isn't it? :-)

jaerose said...

Finding the words..I am glad she did..very cathartic a big scream..and I am glad someone stroked her hair..Jae :)

Deborah said...

Wow ... I've gone all limp too! Wonderfully written.

Nara Malone said...

Very Emotive. I could feel that inner storm building right through until it was spent.

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

wow a carthartic scream that's always good

JL Dodge said...

Way to use the words... Really Nice Susannah !

Old Altonian said...

So he went out for a beer, then drove home. I think she over-reacted - sorry!

Susannah said...

LOL - Old Altonian. :-)

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for your comments, much appreciared. :-)

Jessica Prescott said...

you used the words very well.
what an emotionally powerful story

trisha said...

loved the conclusion, the story and the conclusion beautifully woven together. ended with a sweet taste. :)

trisha
http://magicthought.wordpress.com/2011/05/19/the-trip-for-3ww/

Ramesh Sood said...

I liked it..very well weaved..each strand carefully done..

honeyhaiku said...

A intense piece.

rmpWritings said...

you built up quite an intense storm. a powerful feel courses throughout. lovely write.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much everyone. :-)

mindlovemisery said...

Powerful imagery! Amazing story

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