Forgive my feet
while I learn the steps
(I'll stick to the shallows
until I can face the ocean)
I am not broken - I am dancing
Sunlight across my shoulder
a mantle I'll gladly wear
(forgive my false causes
as I drop all my woes)
I am not broken - I am dancing
I will draw back the bolt
that kept my door locked
(and applaud as hoops topple
I'll jump through them no more)
I am not broken - I am dancing
Written for The Sunday Whirl
I wrote this on Sunday but wasn't pleased with it and thought maybe I would try again later in the week, or even give the wordle a miss this week! The words really didn't flow for me this week. But I have decided to post it anyway as I really don't like to miss the Sunday Whirl. :-)
7 comments:
I love the repetion of "I am not broken = I am dancing. It heigtens the effectand drives the point home. Well wordled!
Thanks Mary. :-) I found this weeks difficult, just could get a flow. Never mind, some weeks it pours onto the page some week it dribbles and smears! LOL
Good to see you. x
The parenthetical lines are cleverly placed before each repetition. I love this piece. It's sparse, but leaves room for the reader to imagine what's happening as someone/something new emerges. It feels almost like a butterfly emerging from a cocoon tomb. I'm glad you posted!
Thanks Brenda. :-) I almost missed this weeks. Good to see you. x
smart writing.
smart writing.
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