tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post4383231933424042544..comments2023-09-04T09:31:46.467+01:00Comments on Panopticulated - writing when prompted to do so.: Extinguished - Magpie Tale #34Susannahhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09581993763700327953noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-69857766493451186072010-10-06T23:46:30.831+01:002010-10-06T23:46:30.831+01:00Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and fo...Thanks everyone for taking the time to read and for the great comments. Much appreciated!<br /><br />Susannah :-)Susannahhttp://panopticulated.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-23713104308329005302010-10-06T14:29:20.957+01:002010-10-06T14:29:20.957+01:00I love the line "the gate will not open and s...I love the line "the gate will not open and shut with a satisfying click". Beautiful piece.Tess Kincaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04889725786678984293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-30661606373943732062010-10-05T04:30:07.342+01:002010-10-05T04:30:07.342+01:00Oh - "the night will sweep in unannounced...&...Oh - "the night will sweep in unannounced..." how often has that happened?<br /><br />Beautiful job Susannah.Jenniferhttp://www.jensrealia.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-61686175588766070192010-10-04T22:04:15.263+01:002010-10-04T22:04:15.263+01:00Susannah i love the imagery and power in this poem...Susannah i love the imagery and power in this poem...you are such an amazing poet! :-)Carrie Van Hornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11715648073882529202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-3728254432153929562010-10-02T18:55:16.510+01:002010-10-02T18:55:16.510+01:00very dark
but I do sense a crack of light under a ...very dark<br />but I do sense a crack of light under a doorsillAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-3263842326861326732010-10-02T18:02:46.198+01:002010-10-02T18:02:46.198+01:00Nice write...ringing in the emptiness of what was....Nice write...ringing in the emptiness of what was....amazing how cold a place can become without emotion....bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-22756310638503165922010-10-02T18:00:14.668+01:002010-10-02T18:00:14.668+01:00wow...this had a marvelous flow to it...and a nice...wow...this had a marvelous flow to it...and a nice punch as well...great magpie...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-46870188029595514502010-10-02T17:08:17.480+01:002010-10-02T17:08:17.480+01:00The moths will bump and fizzle elsewhere... what a...The moths will bump and fizzle elsewhere... what a fabulous line. Great write here... Love and Light, SenderUnknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17142100957711935950noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-45991791355039275792010-10-02T06:00:40.053+01:002010-10-02T06:00:40.053+01:00That is so sad.That is so sad.kathi harrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10966848441799595900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-56177531362420872992010-10-02T05:35:00.425+01:002010-10-02T05:35:00.425+01:00Wonderful use of the senses and playing off of the...Wonderful use of the senses and playing off of the cold elements of longing.Reflectionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09655163868990155242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-16251254207268859672010-10-02T04:33:02.774+01:002010-10-02T04:33:02.774+01:00"And the gate will not open and shut with a s..."And the gate will not open and shut with a satisfying click, and the rest of the world will not be left outside the fence." - my favorite lines!<br /><br />Reminds me of Miss Havisham's house.anahttp://theperfectionproject.wordpress.com/2010/10/01/lantern-light/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-39123007080734713932010-10-01T23:54:31.223+01:002010-10-01T23:54:31.223+01:00Reading this I wanted to put my head down and just...Reading this I wanted to put my head down and just weep. Beautifully wrought words.Paulinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14555472024981357622noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-5460529320432973922010-10-01T21:33:45.693+01:002010-10-01T21:33:45.693+01:00Such sadness described by what "won't&quo...Such sadness described by what "won't" be... Seeing how much is missing; how much is lost, makes this piece all the more poignant in it's grief. You even set the season by the missing moths. Carefully and very cleverly written. Great Magpie piece.brokenpenwriterhttp://brokenpenwriter.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-8406186778791996382010-10-01T08:15:29.626+01:002010-10-01T08:15:29.626+01:00Beautifully written. It's sad, but pleasingly....Beautifully written. It's sad, but pleasingly.Jim Swindlehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13632113399696237695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-24097598460576433252010-10-01T04:27:09.287+01:002010-10-01T04:27:09.287+01:00A powerful piece - I love it!A powerful piece - I love it!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-72146055950293423092010-10-01T02:02:45.426+01:002010-10-01T02:02:45.426+01:00Cold and unforgiving. Perhaps the dissappointed th...Cold and unforgiving. Perhaps the dissappointed thoughts of a jilted lover? Quite excellent this. Enjoyed it immensely!Roguehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14865195377873721939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-66704737031159220862010-09-30T20:28:42.098+01:002010-09-30T20:28:42.098+01:00I loved the flow of this piece and how many emotio...I loved the flow of this piece and how many emotions were packed into its lines. I could really feel the longing and the feeling of loss.<br /><br />Beautiful writing!RavenQuillshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01837486388548035316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-28570007783417692182010-09-30T19:44:21.829+01:002010-09-30T19:44:21.829+01:00Beautifully expressed and to think...I wasn't ...Beautifully expressed and to think...I wasn't depressed a moment ago, but now? ...arghhh<br /><br />Still beautiful though.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-41981082888859638652010-09-30T17:29:08.519+01:002010-09-30T17:29:08.519+01:00amazing.. left me wanting to read more.. lots of e...amazing.. left me wanting to read more.. lots of emotions, flow! great Magpie!<br /><br /><a href="http://leonnyes.wordpress.com/2010/09/30/magpie-and-hmh/" rel="nofollow">My Magpie</a>Vinay Leo R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13132856855570330824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-88910866049539682812010-09-30T17:01:42.996+01:002010-09-30T17:01:42.996+01:00So sad. Lovely Magpie.So sad. Lovely Magpie.Book Bird Doghttp://bookbirddog.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-43235857395575057262010-09-30T15:33:03.635+01:002010-09-30T15:33:03.635+01:00Awfully well written -- beautiful.Awfully well written -- beautiful.Berownehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09524661173663604641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-83839616485548571242010-09-30T15:20:15.057+01:002010-09-30T15:20:15.057+01:00Again, your description of a scene, is vivid as it...Again, your description of a scene, is vivid as it engages the senses.<br /> <i>"The moths will bump and fizzle elsewhere, they will not meet their doom here tonight".</i><br />That is amazing.<br /><br />The unlit lamp left you cold too, I see. This scene you painted sent a chill up my spine.Davidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17348447844218276729noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-34221470009241344002010-09-30T15:01:15.339+01:002010-09-30T15:01:15.339+01:00Longing...beutifully said..Longing...beutifully said..rashmihttp://poem-myworldofexcitement.blogspot.com/2010/09/poem-18-kingdom.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-91199123390434811642010-09-30T13:54:56.419+01:002010-09-30T13:54:56.419+01:00This has very good flow, The feelings, emotions, t...This has very good flow, The feelings, emotions, the longings..<br /><br /><a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2010/09/doomed-if-i-do-doomed-if-i-dont.html" rel="nofollow">doomed if I do, doomed if I don't</a>gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2866329577695235177.post-6239935593855741242010-09-30T13:14:10.202+01:002010-09-30T13:14:10.202+01:00beautiful sentiments captured in your tale.
well c...beautiful sentiments captured in your tale.<br />well constructed work.Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01546696605935159862noreply@blogger.com